We have began to looked at different poetic devices in our classes and you have began to create our own poems; lets share YOUR POEMS with other students from Year 7 English.
Your Task:
1. Please publish your poem by clicking on the "comment" tab of this blog.
2. Read another one of your peers poems.
3. Identify and describe what poetic devices (metaphor, simile, personification, alliteration) they have used.
4. Indicate one postive aspect of their poem and one area they could improve on
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My mother cries as I walk out the door she howls like the wind and the sea. I wave goodbye and say nothing more, I am a bird about to soar free.
ReplyDelete15 years later I charge back through the door, Im like a bird returning to it's tree. My mother smiles. We are back together again. NOW we can both go back to sleep. SHHHHHHHHHH
I like it when...
ReplyDeleteI like it when someone turns on loud music.
I like it when my brother plays games.
I like it when my dad takes me to eat at a restaurant.
I like it when my friend invites me to a party.
I like it when my sister watches TV.
I like it when my teacher gives me homework.
I like it when my guitar teacher teaches me a well known song.
By Nung Kitsomsub
One weight less Walrus, Two Tiny Tom Cats, Three Free Bees, Four Fighting Foxes, Five Flying Foxes, Six Slimy Snakes, Seven Smart Snails, Eight Enourmous Elephants, Nine Nice Nightingales, Ten Tough Tigers. By Brendan Smith
ReplyDeleteGolden Retriever
ReplyDeleteBy Suveer Sachdev
My friend has a golden retriever,
It's fur as smooth as silk,
It's color as gold as golden thread,
It's eyes are black diamonds shinning in the sky,
As it tail wags revealing the glory like winning the fastest dog competition in the world,
My friend has a golden retriever...
And it is now dead.
One wild wartog,
ReplyDeleteTwo terrifying tigers,
Three tumbling turtles,
Four farting fish,
Five fumbling frogs,
Six silly snakes,
Seven stupid seagulls,
Eight evil elephants,
Nine nasty newts,
Ten teethless termites,
Eleven eyeless emus,
Twelve trashing tadpoles,
Thirteen thirsty tarantulas,
Fourteen flying foxes,
Fiveteen figity flamingoes,
Sixteen stupifying slugs,
Seventeen singing snails,
Eighteen extingushed eagles,
Nineteen naughty nurse sharks,
Twenty trembling turkeys.
By Suveer Sachdev
Makeups
ReplyDeleteMy lipgloss were hiphop dancing
My mascara were reading a magazine about makeup
My eyeshadow were modeling for the fashion show
My eyeliner were giggling about conditioner
My blush were blushing because she is embarassed
I think my makeup are pretty wild!!!!!!
By: Hina Yamada
ishaan:
ReplyDeleteone soccer ball
two pairs of shoes
three red t-shirts
four black shorts
five baseball gloves
six stinky under pants
seven hockey sticks
eight pairs of caps
nine tennis rackets
ten white socks
eleven swmming googles
twelve cheeing fans
ISHAAN:
ReplyDeleteALLITERATION.
POSTIVE:One weight less Walrus, Two Tiny Tom Cats, Three Free Bees, Four Fighting Foxes,Six Slimy Snakes, Seven Smart Snails, Eight Enourmous Elephants,Ten Tough Tigers.
IMPROVE ON:Five Flying Foxes(reapeting same animal),Nine Nice Nightingales.
1 swift sooccer ball,
ReplyDelete2 thrown basketballs
3 flying tennis balls
4 running softballs
5 jumping volley balls
6 walking snookerballs
7 white golf balls
8 shoved hockey balls
9 angry baseballs
10 hit cricketballs
11 orange ping pong balls
12 sliding icde hockey balls
13 fast skiers
14 cool a squares
15 nice swimmers
16 uncatchable runners
17 long pole voalters
18 tired air hockey balls
19 hard billiard balls
20 sharp archers
ninad
ReplyDeletenature nature you are a wonder
Your trees are crisp and tender
Your grass is as soft as silk
But sometimes ypur floweers smell like milk
You truly are a beauty
And always are on duty
Your the one and only of its kind
With the greatest mind
ninad
ReplyDeleteList poem
I like it when someone turns on loud music
I like it when my brother plays games
I like it when my dad takes me to eat at a resteraunt
i like it when ny friends invite me to a party
I like it when my sister watshes T.V
I like it when my teacher gives me homework
I like it when my guitar teacher teaches me a well known song
Positive- It has good lines and a good poem
Negative- It does not make sense sometimes
Swimming in the sea
ReplyDeleteDhruv seth:
In my dream, swimming in the sea
I felt like a bumble bee
jumping up and down, I beat the waves
Deep down i saw some caves
That looked like dark death rays
My Guinea pig is always sleeping
ReplyDeleteMy Guinea pig don't like to run
My Guinea pig like eating
My Guinea pig like to eat grass
My Guinea pig is fat
My Guinea pig have 3 colours
LIST POEM
ReplyDeleteMy Guinea Pig looks very cute
My Guinea Pig is very chubby
My Guinea Pig likes to sleep
My Guinea Pig has 3 colors
My Guinea Pig like eating grass
SIMILE POEM
ReplyDeleteThe World looks like colorful gobstoppers
The World world smells like the breezy air
The World feels like rough things couvering the world
The World taste like yummy candies
LIST POEM
ReplyDeleteMonkeys are very noisy
Monkeys always eat bananas
Monkeys are hairy
Monkeys are dirty
Monkeys has lice
Monkeys can climb trees
Cheetah
ReplyDeleteCheetah as fast as a flaming arrow
Cheetah as strong as a tightly coiled spring
Cheetah Proudly he blazes across the dawn savannah
Cheetah as lonesome as a grizzly bear
By Sammy
Dolphins
ReplyDelete********
Dolphins as fast as a flying arrow
Dolphins saving lives like a life guard
Dolphins skin smooth as silk
Dolphins playful, a hyper child
Dolphins said to be as intellegent as humans
Dolphins creatures that change the world
By Isabel Hahn
Somethings Coming!!!
ReplyDeleteSomethings coming up the stairs
Let's hope it's waring underwear!
Somethings walking down the hall
I think its got a rubber ball!
Somethings banging on the door
I think it's going to break the floor!
I can not bear to tell you any more!!!
By Olivia 7E
Reya
ReplyDeleteThe wind was as cold as ice
The leaves were dancing grace ful and nice
I was as snug as a bug in a rug
The blanket was as smooth as slik
I watch the snow come down as hard as a rock
The water was frozen
I feel like I'm in a box
Warm and cozy
My Dog♥
ReplyDeleteMy Dog is cutest animal in the world.
My Dog is small.
My Dog is white as a cloud, soft as a cotton candy.
My Dog likes to sleep, likes to eat jerhigh.
My Dog always gets good services from our family.
My Dog is cute first class lady!
Sanjana:
ReplyDeleteone wise whale, two tall tigers, three thirsty tortoise, four ferocious falcons, five foolish fish, six swimming starfishes, seven scared snakes, eight enormous elephants, nine noisy nags, ten tame turtles, eleven elegant eagles, twelve true toads, thirteen thorny, fourteen fresh flamingoes, fifteenflying frogs, sixteen silly serpants, seventeen smart snails, eighteen energetic eels, nineteen nice nile crocodiles, twenty tough T-Rex.
Sanjana:
ReplyDeleteMy heart desires a white horse.
It's grace and beauty takes my breath away.
It's majestic colour makes us all smile.
Oh wonderful horse, where are you?
I ride it at dawn, I ride it at dusk.
When I'm sad it makes me happy,
when I'm happy it makes me overjoyed!
Oh wonderful friend, where are you?
I hate when my dad scold at me
ReplyDeleteI hate when people boss me around
I hate when brothers screaming at each other
I hate when sister poke my eye
I hate when my parents say that play time is over
I hate when mom tells me to read books
I hate when my dogs bark loudly
I hate when mom wakes me up in the morning
I hate when friends argue
I hate when people have problems
I hate when everyone is in a bad mood
I hate when people annoys me
I hate when staying at home doing nothing
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ReplyDeleteList poem:
ReplyDeleteMy dog is playful
My dog is energetic
My dog is crazy about food
My dog is cute
My dog is a beagle
My dog is my family member
I like it when my friends comes to my house
ReplyDeleteI like it when my mom takes me to other countries
I like it when my cousins play with me
I like it when people are in a good mood
I like it when my mom allows me to sleep late
I like it when my sister listens to music
I like it when my teacher gives me fun homework
I like it when my dog cheers me up
I like it when I get good grades
Simile..
ReplyDeleteIce cream...
Ice cream is as cold as antarctica
Ice cream is yummier than gobstoppers
Ice cream smells better than perfume
Ice cream looks like melted ice
Ice cream feels like it is imported from a land far far away
The ice cream's cone is as hard as rock
Irin's Poem:)
ReplyDeleteI like it when...
I like it when I'm at a party
I like it when I'm at a shopping mall
I like it when my locker is clean
I like it when I hand in my homework
I like it when I beat Pearl in foursquare:)
Poetic devices used
I'm read Pearl's poem and I like a lot of things in it. What I like about the poem is that there is a lot of things in the poem. Maybe because everyline starts with 'I like it when my' there was a line that starts like 'I like it when people' which makes it a little different than the rest of the starters in the poem!:)
I am reading Irin's poem and there are lots of words in it.
ReplyDeleteIrin's poem is a list poem.
Positive-It all starts with the same word at the beggining
Negative-There should be more sentences in her list
the yummy doghnut
ReplyDeletethe yummy doughnut has dancing sprinkles
the yummy doughnut dances elegantly
the yummy doughnut is as soft as a feather
the yummy doughnut's icing makes peoples mouth water
the yummy doughnuts smooth dough feels so good against my throat
the yummy doughnuts sprinkles feels like rain in my mouth
List Poem:
ReplyDeleteOne old orangutan
two twirly tigers
three tiny turtles
four farting foxes
five flipping flamingos
six saucy snails
seven sweet seagulls
eight enormous eels
nine naughty newts
ten twinkling tigers
eleven enthusiastic elephants
twelve thick tapirs
thirteen thriving thrashers
fourteen fearless fleas
fifteen fast falcons
sixteen sporty starfishes
seventeen stinky sardines
eighteen easy going eyras
nineteen nasty needle fishes
twenty trembling tapeworms!
By: Nern S 7A
My cat is fat his face is flat it was run over by a car and he Died
ReplyDeleteI like the....
ReplyDeleteI like the air,
I like the moon,
I like the graphics on computers,
I lkie the sound of twitering birds,
I like the calm peace at home,
I like the beasts of the world,
I like the internet in wich people can connect,
I like my name because im James,
By: James Rogers
i like it when
ReplyDeletei like it when i go to sleep
i like it when i play pc
i like it when i wake up
i like it when i read
i like it when i win
i like it when i hand in homework
i like it when i make a new friend
i like it when i run
i like it when i make a new pc trick
By reuben
1 white whale
ReplyDelete2 tiny turtles
3 thoughtless threats
4 flying fish
5 fearless flies
6 secondary students
7 stupid starfish
8 enormous eels
9 naughty nitingales
10 trusting tortoise
11 early elephants
12 tonned tigers
13 thorny thickets
14 fat fire flies
15 flattened frogs
16 sick snowfish
List Poem:
ReplyDeleteI love it when my family and i travel to different countries
I love it when my dogs run to me when i get home
I love it when i hear the sound of my ringtone knowing that somebody called me
I love it when i feel relaxed
I love it when my friends come over to my house
I love it when my sisters are in a good mood
I love it when I get good grades
I love it when my teacher gives me less homework
By Nern S 7A
Macaroni & Cheese
ReplyDeleteAs bright colored as the sun,
the macaroni & cheese is a jungle in the mountains but just painted yellow
Macaroni & cheese smells better than the scent of my favorite perfume,
it is the lava pouring out of a volcano
The cheese is thicker than a fat elephant,
the macaroni & cheese is the shape of the full moon broken in half.
By Nern S. 7A
I read Irin's poem. She made a list poem. I like it because it is very clear and simple about what she likes. She didn't use a metaphor or a simile.
ReplyDeletePositive: She made it clear and easy to understand:)
Negative: She could make it a little longer so people know more about her!!
By: Nern S 7A
One worrying wombat
ReplyDeleteTwo tiny tadpoles
Three thoughtless tigers
Four fantastic fish
Five fledging falcons
Six sad snakes
seven silly salamanders
eight enormous elephants
nine naughty newts
ten thinking tigresses
eleven equal eels
twelve tattletale turtles
thirteen terrible tortoises
fourteen freaky flies
fifteen funny frogs
sixteen slippery snails
seventeen slidy seals
eighteen eggy earthworms
nineteen nifty nemos
twenty tip-toey Thai-dogs
I read Nern's list poem!
ReplyDeleteA positive thing about her poem is that she used funny sentences to make the list poem :-)
....There is a teenie weenie thing that Nern should do....It is that Nern should find a word other than easy going because it kind of get me mixed up about going....it just pops out! just that! I think that the poem is excellent because I took time to find a small negative point! :P
I am an angry beaver,
ReplyDeletebiting chunks off a tree,
such a tiring thing to do,
People pass,
I scream,
They don't notice,
What a boring day!
I like lots of things
ReplyDeleteOne of them are all my pets
They're fun to be with
crazy is an adjective
ReplyDeletecrazy is nuts
crazy is funny
crazy is weird
crazy is mad
crazy is a madman dancing all over
As quiet as nothing
ReplyDeleteNo wind blowing like space
Also hollow as a tree
As hard to guess like a faceless emotion
-----SILENCE-----
Graffiti comes in many shapes and sizes.
ReplyDeleteSome long like spaghetti strings.
And some are midgets.
Some are pigs in a barn.
And some are slim models as they glide across the catwalk.
It is great fun drawing on big, brown, bumpy walls.
But don't get caught because if someone catches you in the act...
You'll be a monkey locked in a cage while the others glare at you!!!
I'd like to comment a few things on Nern Siriwat's Poem.
ReplyDeleteI liked it because of the alliteration such as: I love it when .......
I also thought that the last sentence was funny and I truly agree with her. I think it is a great poem.
I think you can make the poem better by:
- Checking her grammar because there was mistakes like: lowercase i
- Maybe you can include:
Metaphors, similes, alliteration etc.
Well Done :D
Commented by: Hiroko Hongyok ;)
I realised my baby raccoon had a amazing tail,
ReplyDeleteFor an animal that lives on a land
It has the similarity or a giant killer whale tail
As it is lying there beached on the sand.
Sorry accidently posted the last one:(
ReplyDeleteThis is the correct poem.
I realised my baby raccoon had an amazing tail,
For an animal thta lives on the land,
It has the similarity of a giant, killer whales tail.
As it is lying there beached on the sand...
(Dont cry!)
BenBen
ReplyDeleteSome thing bad is going to happen...
I can hear the roaring noise from the sky
I can feel it is comming by.
I can see the the blackness from my eye
I can think of what is going happen
It is bad as spell
It can ruin every one's day
Just because of the ........
Rain
I can Feel
ReplyDeleteI Can feel the hotness like the sun melting on me
I Can feel the coldness like freezing water on me
I Can feel the softness like the world is foam
I Can feel the hardness like a stone for my bed
I Can feel the heavyness like lifting a car
I can feel the lightness like the feather
I can feel.........
BY BenBen
Justin:
ReplyDeleteI LIKE IT
I like it when someone smiles
I like it when me and my sister are making jokes
I like it when I go chill with my friends
I like it when I open blasting music blasting my eardrums
I like it when I am watching a funny movie
I like it when I am playing my guitar
I like it when I score in basketball
I like it when I reject someone in basketball
I like it when I get lots of money
I like it when I am HAPPY
My dogs are laughing so loud that I need ear plugs,
ReplyDeleteMy fish are crying because a spider fell in the tank and died,
My cats are wearing their favorite clothes for a gecko's party,
My rabbits are dancing in their cage and I feel annoyed,
What crazy pets they are!
The Old Soldier
ReplyDeleteThe Old soldier, its back to its memories, trying to find a new way to start,
trying to look to the light, not the dark.
His battle scars ache.
Uncomfortable memories.
Trying to let go of all his friends that died.
He will never be at ease from what he has seen.
Always standing to attention for the lost.
Trying to find a new beginning.
The Old soldier, its back to its memories, trying to find a new way to start,
trying to look to the light, not the dark.
By Sammy 7A
What is..... a Balloon?
ReplyDeleteA balloon is a dot,
Floating on a piece of paper.
It is a helmet,
Making people's life safer.
It is a bottle cap,
Branded with labels.
It is an eraser,
Erasing all the mistakes,
It is a rainbow ball,
Showing off all it's colors.
By Suveer Sachdev 7A
New Zealand the jewel of the Pacific
ReplyDeleteIt is the most hard working country
A small island over an evil sea
An island that has everything
Colder than inside an ice cube
Cinquain Poem
ReplyDeleteCaitlin
Caitlin
Beautiful, Special,
Laughing, Singing, Joking,
A little Ms. Gorgeous
Caitlin
By: Saanya Mishra 7A
Cinquain Poem
ReplyDeleteVictoria
Victoria,
Hilarious, Amazing,
Smiling, Jumping, Laughing
She is an angel
Victoria
By: Saanya Mishra 7A
Metaphor Poem: Fashion
ReplyDeleteWhat is.....Fashion?
Fashion are colored streaks
On a plain blank paper
It is a Rainbow,
On a pale blue sky
It is a multicolored crayon,
That colors the world
It is all the Spices,
That adds that zing to simple foods,
It is all the toppings,
On a bright white frozen yoghurt,
It is Rainbow Rain
That soaks everyone in colours.
By: Saanya Mishra 7A
Sea
ReplyDeleterushing beating
furious super dark
I love the sea
Sea
Dhruv
Anger is poison
ReplyDeleteIt looks like raw power
It is a snake wrapped around you squeezing tighter every second
It sounds like a thousand screams
It tastes like pure bitterness
It smells like the burning intensity of fire.
By: Mannat
Happiness is a smile,
ReplyDeleteIt is a song that is sung by gold hearts,
It feels like god's hands, coming to reach you,
It smells like a cake, a juicy, colourful cake,
It tastes as sweet as sugar,
Happiness is a smile.
By Sanjana 7E
Anger is when you want to kill the person who did it to you,
ReplyDeleteIt feels like beating up someone,
It sounds like the steam coming out of your ear,
It tastes like hot food in your mouth,
It smells like ash from a person smoking,
It looks like a red angry Devil,
This is the power of ANGER!!!
Anger is when people dont get the thing that they want
ReplyDeleteIt feels like boiling water is poured on you,
It sounds like people swearing at each other,
It tastes like hot chilly caught in fire in your mouth,
It smells like fire burning in a person's body,
It looks like a person caught in fire.
Anger,
ReplyDeleteCrackling flames,
Smells damp and sweaty,
Looks like burning eyes full of hate,
Feels like shadows lurking behind,
Tastes bitter as rotting food,
Wanting to yell.